A man and woman at the train station.
M- Why are you leaving, again?
W- The fact that you have already forgotten is ludicrous.
M- I just don't understand. I thought you were happy.
W- Don't give me that fluff Walter. You know as well as I know that I've never been happy.
M- Waaawaahhhhat?
W- Yes. I mean what I said.
M- Annette. Calm down for a brief moment.
W- NO!!! You always do this Walter! You act as if I'm a child! I can think for myself!
M- Of course you can Annette.
W- NO!!! You always agree with me!
M- I know Annette.
W- STOP! STOP. STOP.
M- Annette, let's just go home.
W- Okay.
The Beat
ReplyDeleteAction: The woman in this situation wants happiness and for the man, Walter, to not always agree with her.
Conflict: The woman feels like Walter is preventing her from achieving happiness.
Event: Annette never gets what she wants, but both her and Walter's bickering dies off in the end. Then they both come to an agreement on returning home.
Changes: Obviously the ending ends abruptly. I made it that way to illustrate that Annette is crazy, but I guess it just made it appear as if I didn't want to think of a better ending. But if changes are to be made I would continue further with their arguing and then end with a satisfying resolution: such as the two characters making a compromise to return home, as long as they will try harder to get a long.
Also, ending with a simple "okay" should be changed. I need at least a sentence or two for the last line.
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